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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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lkk4209 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 18 2013 at 3:10 pm
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I believe the "i"s were lower-cased in this poem as a stylistic choice.
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on Oct. 12 2013 at 12:17 am
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To be honest I liked how it sort of just ended. It left my mind to continue running and allowed me to think of all of the other "chains" that I have in my life. 
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I really love this poem! :)
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Great poem, simple but has impact
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I totally agree. I like ti but I wonder how it got so many comments! 
AliMotamedi said...
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This is great. Forget all the small mistakes, poetry is about the idea, the tought and passion that goes into it. The beauty it represents. And I think this is a brilliant piece of poetry. Great job !
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I loved it! Just capetalie Your I's next time.
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exactly!!!!!! I thought I would end up reading a novel and then it just stopped?!
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*pages Whoops, sorry. :p
Shade3043 DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 4 2013 at 11:22 pm
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It's a cool poem, but is it REALLY worth eighty-nine pafes of comments? No. The answer is no. 
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am I the only one who thinks that this poem feels just a little... incomplete?
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kind. [key sarcasm.] The poem's great  
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the first time I read this, I was amazed, but looking back at it, I think it could use some help. The part about the chain is awesome, but everything before needs some work. The rhyming is a little mainstream and the spacing needs a touch up,  but over all a good poem
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It's a beautiful poem. It gives a sense of safety. Love it :)
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this poem is just wow
Zach_M BRONZE said...
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I like the poem; yeah it's just great, but why is it still in the "Most discussed box?" I understand that this poem has a lot of comments, but this is not the greatest poem in the world.
vdvd said...
on Aug. 13 2013 at 1:42 pm
spirit wants to free itself from body  
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My interpretation on this poem (I could be wrong) is that a boy wants to do everything and explore but his father is holding him back.  It seems like the dad is very overprotective.  P.S. I'm new to this site so if you could look at my poems that would be great!
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I feel qyuite stupid saying this but: I love the poem and it seems to have this really cool meaning to it, only thing is: I don't get it! Could someone please explain the poem to me? It's beautiful but I think it'd be even better if I actually understood it. 
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It's amazing how I can actually picture everything in this poem and relate to it- it's truly amazing! Bravo!! :)