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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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Totally beautiful and fearless and powerful, simply amazing, I would love if read a few of my poems and gave me sone constructive criticism
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Hrm... this sounds like a bedtime story for small children. It'snot horrible, but I don't understand why it's been the top rated poem for so many years.
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This is an amazing poem I loved it. But what does the Father represent?
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Is this referring to your father holding you back in some way, or in your father attempting to free you from your limitations? Or would you rather this be left to interpretation?

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