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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~

© Elizabeth G., Marblehead, MA

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This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.
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Ellawind PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 11:14 am
Ellawind PLATINUM, Seattle, Washington
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What doesn&#039;t kill you only makes you stronger.<br /> <br /> Don&#039;t let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game.<br /> <br /> Dream like you will live forever, live like you will die today.

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Ha, I laughed when I read what you said about the teacher. The piece is very descriptive and interesting. It makes you kind of afraid but wanting more simultaneously. Great job! 
cornflake52 said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 11:31 pm
cornflake52, Sanjose, California
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&quot;it&#039;s not the valleys in life i dread so much, as the little dips&quot;<br /> - garfeild

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beautiful! that could be like a prologue to a whole series of books about creatures that eat the life force or the things yet to come in a persons life (thats why children are good prey) and they have been captured and are being fed in a box! or not you know its a nice symbolic piece as it is a just got carried away sry.... xD nvm
NekoGirl810 SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2010 at 1:15 am
NekoGirl810 SILVER, Bellingham, Washington
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wow, that was creepily awesome
_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 3:42 pm
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
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Lol don't listen to your teacher. what you wrote was great. can you check out some of my stuff?
Zzzie SILVER said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 8:36 pm
Zzzie SILVER, North Canton, Ohio
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Loved it! I've posted a few or my school stuff too! (well, the stuff is being reviewed right now) 
Love1321 PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 11:05 am
Love1321 PLATINUM, Harrisville, Utah
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WOW! That was amazing! I love it!  Heh heh, looks like someone is hungry...XD
Coffee BRONZE said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 8:50 am
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
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Your Face.

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that. was. amazing.
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 7:31 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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This was awesome! Lol, if I'd entered this to my teacher she'd be a bit worried too.  No worries.  This was amazing.  Keep writing!

Btw, will you check out and comment on my work?

Cajsim SILVER said...
on Jun. 20 2010 at 1:56 pm
Cajsim SILVER, Reagan, Tennessee
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If your gonna be dumb, then you gotta be tough... ~ My Grandpa

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Sorry u left it logged on and i wrote that last comment on ur profile...
Meago GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2010 at 1:54 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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I thought you were a monster???  Didnt you write this piece as an autobiographical poem??
Meago GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2010 at 1:53 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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lol... You're just upset that I'm better than you and that I'm prettier! lmao!
Meago GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2010 at 1:30 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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Atleast I can drink Apple Juice and keep it in the cup...... AND!!! You're just jealous!!! =P
Cajsim SILVER said...
on Jun. 15 2010 at 10:57 pm
Cajsim SILVER, Reagan, Tennessee
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If your gonna be dumb, then you gotta be tough... ~ My Grandpa

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Wow Smartypants... this girl introduced me to teenink i just signed up and im waiting on the editors to approve a few of my pieces... For now just keep readin this girls stuff! Oh and she has a huge thing for guys that are computer programmers lol so send her an email if u got mad skillz on a pc lol and try and read some of my stuff if it gets up...
We-R-3 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 2 2010 at 7:29 pm
We-R-3 BRONZE, Orlando, Florida
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You know my teacher was also worried about me when she started reading my soon to be novel reapers, 1-4 posted on teenink. I think that the reason is that thoughts are so much scarier than what goes on in real life our minds are very dark places full of hate jealousy lust etc. However they are also capable of passion and caring. Good job you really got me thinking.
jhspy1 said...
on May. 31 2010 at 1:24 am

good story

 

DantesDilemma SILVER said...
on May. 28 2010 at 6:24 pm
DantesDilemma SILVER, Fort Myers, Florida
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A good use of language and poetic metaphors, this piece holds potential. However, a couple of awkward sentences, particularly, the one about unicorns, throw it off. Overall, it possesses an attractively dark tone but suffers from a debilitating lack of polish.
Meago GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 2:32 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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Hey Guys!!!! Monster II is up!!! It took forever to get it up, but it's totally there! If you liked this, you'll love part II. =D
Meago GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 5:57 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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lol! Thanks!!! And yeah, these people are funny!
Zalmon BRONZE said...
on May. 10 2010 at 5:15 pm
Zalmon BRONZE, Lee, New Hampshire
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&quot;There&#039;s something about being that tired and that happy that just makes you kind of high.&quot;<br /> -Myself<br /> about my black belt graduation

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seriously, not funny people... but then why can't i stop laughing?!? Great piece!
Meago GOLD said...
on Apr. 29 2010 at 3:09 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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Thank you ! =D