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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?


As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~


The author's comments:
This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.

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on Jan. 18 2010 at 3:54 pm
Ok slightly creepy but in a good way i think but i still cant grasp what your talking about! killing kids is a little dark though! I like it though! Dark but good :)

on Jan. 6 2010 at 5:06 pm
alvina PLATINUM, Punta Gorda, Florida
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this is kinda freaky but awsome...........i love it!!

on Dec. 29 2009 at 11:22 am
sillyaardvarkabc BRONZE, Riverside, Connecticut
4 articles 0 photos 63 comments
Wow. My sister and I both thought this was amazing. I want to know more, yet it’s perfect the way it is. It’s great!

Meago GOLD said...
on Nov. 20 2009 at 10:06 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Part two isn't published yet. Although I sent it in a while ago. It makes me sad inside.... Like something is missing.

Meago GOLD said...
on Nov. 20 2009 at 10:04 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Thank you!

on Nov. 20 2009 at 12:01 am
Chilling. Very very very chilling. I am amazed how one short paragraph of writing could send me into such a frightened wonder. Well done! I'm impressed.

on Nov. 18 2009 at 3:57 pm
dragonfan SILVER, Arcidia, Indiana
9 articles 1 photo 213 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Death truly makes an artist"

i loved it i sowed my writting app teacher and she liked it too!!! i think i know y ur teacher was worried tho,lol

RLJoy DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 9:39 pm
RLJoy DIAMOND, Glen Rock, New Jersey
56 articles 0 photos 86 comments
This is written very well! The story may be shorter than others but I loved it!!!!! Keep writing

evie428 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 7:20 pm
evie428 BRONZE, Ontario, Other
4 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing a novel is not merely going on a shopping expedition across the border to an unreal land: it is hours and years spent in the factories, the streets, the cathedrals of the imagination."

Oh, I'm sorry, I just read that it was supposed to be a poem . . . ignore my previous comment! :P I'm looking for part 2! :)

evie428 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 7:17 pm
evie428 BRONZE, Ontario, Other
4 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing a novel is not merely going on a shopping expedition across the border to an unreal land: it is hours and years spent in the factories, the streets, the cathedrals of the imagination."

Good job! I do, however, think that it would be more interesting to read if you shaped it to be more like a story. Was it written to be a poem? I love the flow of your writing! Keep it up!

on Nov. 8 2009 at 10:38 pm
ultrabookworm BRONZE, Equestria, Kentucky
2 articles 0 photos 65 comments
It'll sound dumb when I send this in, but here goes...

To me it sounded symbolic for the loss of innocence, not quite as literal. Intentional?

on Nov. 5 2009 at 3:14 pm
SonOfApollo GOLD, Katy, Texas
13 articles 0 photos 40 comments
hmmmm....

now tell me, are you sure this is fiction

on Oct. 7 2009 at 8:08 am
UnidentifiedArtist BRONZE, Spring, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
LOL this was good. Was LOLing at the teacher.

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 3 2009 at 8:52 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Ha! Thanks!

on Oct. 2 2009 at 4:12 pm
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
75 articles 11 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

It was great!

It has flow, and a dark humor to it in a way!

Lol nice on scaring yr teacher! :P

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:09 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

A person who feeds on children. It's just like, a descriptive paragraph about what a killer may be thinking if he were to commit such a crime.

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:08 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

My mom keeps saying that if I continue to write like this, my teachers will try to send me to the guidance office. I think it's fun to freak people out with my writing. =) It's one of my hobbies.

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:06 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Well, sometimes life isn't happy and I enjoy writing about the not so happy parts. lol

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:06 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Thank you very much!

Meago GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2009 at 3:05 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

Thank you!!!!! I like being told I rock! WOOHOO!