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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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i really dont understand either...
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i feel the same way. you are not alone!

 

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Might be missing something, but I read it through several times, and still don't get it. Obviously though most people do, so congrats! I liked the rythum, just didn't see the general idea you were trying to convey.
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sounds so good! i loved the idea.
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very good!! i love it! :)
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cute idea, i loved it. Really liked the rhythm and rhyme (:
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i donteth get itith eitherith.
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This was amazing. It makes me wonder how poems like "Stop the violence" are voted better than this.
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this poem is very well written i liked it alot amazing job
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love this! if anyone would rate/comment my poem called Asthma it would be sooo much appreciated :) I'll do the same for you!
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i looooove it. Beautiful
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jayjay8642 said...
on Apr. 19 2011 at 9:36 pm
I LOVED this poem!!!I thought it was the most beautiful poem I read!!!! Unfortanately I'm not a blondie and don't have the excuse of being stupid and not getting it!!!...JKS!
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This poem was great, it definitely deserves to be on the front page for as long as it was. I loved loved loved how it was such a great metaphor. Btw, if you have time, please check out, comment on, and rate my poems, The Girl Inside, You Are the Lyrics In Me, and Remembering Spring. Thanks so much! 8)
nonstopclem. said...
on Apr. 16 2011 at 8:47 pm
This is very thoughtfully and beautifully written.  It spells out my relationship with my father as well.  I loved it. Good work. :)
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i am not trying to be negative and it may be just how i personaly comprehended it but i was unaware of the whole poem, it didnt make sense to me but keep it up i see that you obviously have fans so more power to ya keep up the creativity!:)
Daddyo said...
on Apr. 15 2011 at 1:38 pm
it was gucci
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IIIII LOOVVVVVEEEE IIITTTTT!! ;-)