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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Apr. 2 2010 at 9:39 am
Jenna4Jesus BRONZE, New Brunswick, North Carolina
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Wow, this is beautiful! :)

Snook BRONZE said...
on Apr. 1 2010 at 9:07 am
Snook BRONZE, Lake City, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
The greatest challenge to any thinker is stating the problem in a way that will allow a solution.

Well written and great way to express thoughts on the subject. Well done =)

on Mar. 31 2010 at 8:55 pm
NeverFallTooHard PLATINUM, Hartford, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Reason is powerless in the expression of Love.~ Rumi<br /> Realisim, in painting, is what one wants to see, not what they really see. ~ Janet Fish

I heart this poem.... it's so nice! i rated u a five! It is sooo pretty, the poem AND the pic! has anyone ever gotten anything published on here?

on Mar. 31 2010 at 11:19 am
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars -Les Brown

But you're right.  I do need to learn how to just breathe.  Lol. I have a lot going on right now and i guess seeing some of the comments people posted about this kid's poem just ticked me off a little.  Sorry.....

on Mar. 31 2010 at 11:17 am
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars -Les Brown

Maybe you're right, but still.  Some of these people's comments may have hurt the writer's feelings, regardless of whether or not you're ever going to meet any of us!!!  I understand jokes, but down right degrading someone or totally trash talking someone's work is rude!!! I like a joke as good as the next one but I HATE rude people that think they know everything.  And yes, I am a girl with a bit of a 'tude.  So what?  If you were in my position you would be too....

on Mar. 31 2010 at 10:28 am
um, exxxxcuse me star lady. but this is the internet. we can post, say, do whatever we want. we aren't ever going to see you anywhere. there isn't anything to worry about :) and i don't care if my posts aren't critical. i'm not a critical person. i like to joke around. maybe you should learn how to. because it seems to me that you're a little girl with a stick in your butt. so take a deep breath, and just calm down :) the world isn't going to end in 2012, so everything will be just fine. thanks.

on Mar. 31 2010 at 1:35 am
SolvoAnimus BRONZE, Jamaica, New York
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i always love reading this poem...its probably my 10th time lol

on Mar. 30 2010 at 9:55 pm
raychell.faith GOLD, Somewhere You Left Your Heart, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You Risk Tears If You Let Yourself Be Tamed;&quot; The Little Prince

i get it. even if i don't. and i think that's really the whole point. hearing echos of phrases like "those who save us," and "the ties that bind."

on Mar. 30 2010 at 8:35 pm
Karma_Chameleon SILVER, English, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
To be able to say &quot;I love you&quot; one must first be able to say &quot;I&quot; - Ayn Rand

Wow pgannon, really?

wolveseye GOLD said...
on Mar. 30 2010 at 1:08 pm
wolveseye GOLD, Tok, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
Which would be worse: To live as a monster, or to die as a good man?

love it! keep writing!

on Mar. 30 2010 at 11:36 am
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you&#039;ll land among the stars -Les Brown

OK. 1st I would like to say that the poem ROCKS!!! 2nd I would like to say I agree with the folks that said we are meant to post comments.  However, the comments do not have to be rude.  Critiquing is an important part of being a good writer.  If you can't critique another's poem then how do you expect them to critique yours? And it's not like any of us are god or watev.  No one is perfect so all ya'll that are actin' all snobby need to stop.  Maybe there's a hidden meaning behind this poem that ya'll don't know about.  For all ya'll know this kid's dad could have been beatin' them and the only way they could vent was through this poem.  Trust me when I say control freaks as parents, so not cool!!! So do me and everyone else up here a favor and back off!!!! ....but like I said, great poem... I loved it!!!!

whatthef said...
on Mar. 29 2010 at 11:01 am

alright, what is going on. runescape sucks. and that person was totally kidding when they put "i love runescape, but i love this poem more" NO ONE LOVES RUNESCAPE OR THIS POEM BECAUSE QUITE FRANKLY THIS POEM MAKES NO SENSE IN PARTS AND IT ALSO IS DEPRESSING AS F AND IT KIND OF MAKES ME WANT TO SHOOT MY DAD EVEN THOUGH I HAVE A LOVELY DAD. omfg, what is wrong with you.

deathisyourfavoritewordbutgreatestfear,

okay why is it your favorite word. its not even a cool word. i have to kill myself now. this is ridiculous. this is just idiotic


on Mar. 29 2010 at 10:59 am
okay, nashy-poo. this had nothing to do with the poem. get with the program.

on Mar. 29 2010 at 10:57 am
THATS WHY WE BE COMMENTING ON THIS. TO GET OUT COMMENTS OUT TO THE TEENINK WRITING WORLD. SO DON'T TELL ME TO KEEP THEM TO MYSELF. I'LL BE LETTING YOU KNOW WHAT MY COMMENTS ARE.

Ramzan SILVER said...
on Mar. 29 2010 at 9:56 am
Ramzan SILVER, Loveland, Ohio
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Wonderful poem. The end hints at more, and is just a little bit haunting. Great job!

on Mar. 28 2010 at 8:18 pm
Caroline Klidonas SILVER, York, Pennsylvania
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The ending is uncomfortable but gives the entire poem meaning and a reason for being written. I love how it all leads up to that. Nice work.

on Mar. 27 2010 at 9:59 pm
Shivanie BRONZE, Manhattan, New York
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Favorite Quote:
expect the unexpected

THIS IZ REALLY NICE LUV IT

keyoka SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 7:55 pm
keyoka SILVER, Mckinney, Texas
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I saw a lot of meenie/random posts here...

I actually really liked the poem...alot. It's beautiful.

I thought it was written very well and the person that wrote it is very talented and should keep writing


on Mar. 26 2010 at 5:23 pm
deathismyfavoritewordbutmygreatestfear SILVER, Collinsville, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Without you my life was like a starless night

nice. I used to ♥ runescape 2.....then I grew up.....(no offense) but I do like this poem. If you looks through the lines, you see the story behind it. People who dont c this, obviously don't have an iner persepective.

P.S. could you guys check out my stories and poems and everything. i dont have many things up, but id really like some comments so that I could improve. Thank you :)


pgannon said...
on Mar. 26 2010 at 10:53 am
who wants an alltoid